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Post feedbacks if you liked it or how I could improve it.

Funny stuff in there man, funny stuff.

Glad you liked it.

Lotta oddly-constructed sentences that didn't flow so well... I'm not even sure I get the ending, or what happened. Breakage of the third wall seemed awkward, slightly contrived, totally unnecessary, and it broke the flow. And why digress to talk about the setting if you could've simply described it before detailing the events of the story?

I'm pretty sure I can fix most of it, I'll try to do it before the end of the weekend.

Yeah, describing the city the way you did... not a great idea. You could have easily intertwined it with the following paragraph. Add it in there while she's on her way to the river.

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Anyway, that conversation had in no way changed what Sainha Peira was going to do.

Take "Anyway" out of that sentence. Instead of stating that her mind was unchanged, give the reader the impression that she hadn't changed her mind by making her respond arrogantly and/or snobbishly to the man.

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For some obscure reason that even I, the narrator, don’t know yet,

Why are you writing this as a narrator? Was that part of the assignment?
I'd say take that whole sentence out. Keep the suspense going. She's trapped, and telling us she lost the skii-doo doesn't fit. Unless it was some sort of precious object that belonged to the family.

Again, to keep the suspense going, remove "Then" from this sentence:

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Then, she felt the water getting higher and higher.

Oh, and you rushed through and at the ending.

Wow, that makes a lot of sense. I'll change those little details right now. Seems like I'll be improving my writing skills a lot with that short story

Also, the idea I had with the ski-doo was that it would block the water that was able to go through the dam leading to the flood.