Excellent narration @David, though perhaps it puts thoughts in the player's head a bit too much.

If one of these stories is going to be played on this forum I advise that we agree on the "form" of it here and then create a new topic for the game itself, to avoid confusion. I think the game should play like an old text adventure in that the players can take actions besides moving in a direction, but that these actions should be relevant to the situation and not ridiculous - not "Drop your pants and moon at the Demon", for example. Push, Pull, Take, Give, Talk etc. should be acceptable, as well as other common actions. We have the advantage that we are not constrained by the limited comprehension of a text game interpreter, and as narrators can give appropriate responses to almost anything the player chooses to do.