So I was screwing around in Fruity Loops today, and assembled a track which I belive fits the tone of a underground/basement style area.

http://www.mediafire.com/download.php?oygzzjygdzj

Remember its VERY rough, I know Ill need to add more.

Add more?

I was going to suggest take away the so very random large ammount of effects you have...
It started out good but then you started playing with wah effects like crazy and definitely out of them, like if it that wasn't bad anough ew at 1:17+

Try to keep it clean. Remember that music in games is intended to act as a background to an specific scene, except for battles in which the music has to be intense.

Remember, this is EXTREMELY rough and I might add my first attempt at ANY music. The brother says he thinks it turned out alright, but 1:17 I think I need to explain more on it.

I wanted it slowly turn into an echoing background, something that is falling behind you, or has gotten past you and you're trailing it. And the cut off at the end is well, just a nasty cut off.

You do not need to explain music. Music has to explain itself.

Which is why 99% of the current music sucks, they have nothing to explain, everything has been done and it's all the same.
I realise this is your first piece and all but just thought you should know that from the very beggining of getting into creating music.

I'd try right now to make specific pieces for specific themes, for example, grab the concept of a forest or fire and attempt to express them through music, that'd be an excercise I'd personally assign to students on a music compositing career. After that you can start with a litle bit more complex concepts such as scenarios in the lands of lingia, for example a dungeon cave where there's a lot of mean guys. You'll realise that there's more variables coming into consideration and all. Overall if you try to compose on (or for) an specific concept it will turn out much better than making tons of demos or "unnamed" songs expecting to name them later and grabbing things out of nowhere. Just like in architecture, music without a concept if nothing.

Piling a variety of effects onto a single short loop that plays over and over and over doesn't make a good substitute for an actual song. I would seriously suggest adding some sort of variation to like the actual melody. It was ok for a first attempt though. Idk though, in my experience, fruity loops is a complete pos and everything anyone makes comes out as a weird funky ass song that makes me wonder why they use it.

Have my english skills decreased so much or he's just not making any sense?

I understood him, except for pos?

Pile of shit.

I agree, I need to add more than effects to screw with the melody, Im just having trouble finding...that instrument. Ya know?