http://www.purevolume.com/piecesmended

i think the next thing i post as my songs will be a full recorded album, my dad's got a set up, so it'd be better, i used a bit of autotune on my voice, doesn't sound as good.

take some aspirin for that headache but it wont help no no no, cause im in your fucking head and i have taken full control.

you're senses are dulled and your wishing, you're wishing you knew what you're thinking, what you're thinking, well i know, you're begging, you're begging at night to believe it, well believe it baby oh.


i've got your fucking heart in my hand, i'll crush it like the last time you did. (x2)

Post has been edited 1 time(s), last time on May 24 2009, 7:09 pm by ToA.

Am I wrong for expecting this to be a love song based on the title?

Remove the "fuckings" (the sound really forced) and work on fleshing out the poetic irony that comes with the heartbreaker becoming the heartbroken.

I'm going to give you right now THE BEST advice someone will ever give you ever in your life:

You're

True, if you're going to write weak lyrics, at least spell them correctly.

The only part I really liked was the start, It seems like the start and mid dont flow together very well, it changes pace and feeling to fast.

I liked House The others were ok.

thats lyrically one of my favorites, thank you, i think im gonna play it now.

Post has been edited 1 time(s), last time on May 24 2009, 7:04 pm by ToA.

ToA... You might want to listen to those who critiziced you negatively as well...

i always do.