My first stab at fanfiction for starcraft!

I was reflecting on the fact that a recent, really epic RP with a couple of mates had just gone down the toilet when one of them got permabanned from bnet for no reason.

I thought back on the events of the RP up to then, and found that it actually made a half-decent story!

Sooooooo, I decided to write it up, obviously adding writers touches, cutting a few unnesecary pieces out, but on a whole, the story seemed to work brilliantly!

I'm planning on writing a little series, and this is the Prologue for the story. I plan on writing much more when I get time, but anyway, without further ado:

Scorched Earth: Prologue, Cruisin'
Scorched Earth: Chapter One, From the Wreckage

Post has been edited 2 time(s), last time on Apr 8 2008, 12:16 pm by candle12345.

That is pretty damn nicely done man, I applaud your writing skill.

Nice story, i like how you get into the minds of the characters, like the scourge and the pilot
Overall, Nice

Yeah, I really fleshed out this bit.
In our roleplay, this entire prologue was thus:

"Okay, so I need a way to put em in the middle of zerg territory, then we can introduce your characters intot he story, suggestions?"
"Dropship crash"
"Sounds good"
"Okay, they were flying thedrophsip, scourge hits the engine, they crash yadayada, and we're on the surface, let's go from there"
and so the RP began

I think that, over all, the story was extremely well done. However, I don't really like your last sentence. It should end with something like...
The dropship slammed violently into the ground, causing nearby rocks hurtling through the air, and the intense heat of the explosion scorching the earth...

No no, I wanted to give you 2 views of the crash at the very end, one in the cockpit, the other some distance away, almost a spectator, watching the dropship slowly arc towards the ground and then hit the ground in a plume.

It wasn't supposed to be a huge action sequence, I wanted to end Zack on a semi-peaceful note. I think the sentence was a good one to end with, so I used it.

Interesting way to do it. Well, I guess it was just a prologue, so not too intense.

Yeah, I wanted it to feel like, it's not over yet, and it leaves a sort of cliffhanger, even though oyu don't know everyone, you don't know whether anyones alive or dead [sept zack]. It's a way to end a section of an ongoing story, not a way to end a story itself.

Post has been edited 1 time(s), last time on Mar 24 2008, 1:52 pm by candle12345.

This is plain brilliant. Waiting for next chapter...

The next chapter is fully thought out, I'm waiting for it to go off the front page of SC.org before I write it up though, that way I can rename it to 'Prologue' as it really shoulda been.

Hopefully the next chapter will be a little longer, depending on how much I write.

Crashship RPG Amirite?

new chapter plz? NEW TERRAN INFANTRY UNIT also PLz .

I never thought of it as Crash RPG, but now I think about it...
Do you want a reaper, or a new unit altogether, because I thought about having reapers...

WOW!

I like it .

Try to actually comment when you reply guys. Don't just go "omgz it's schmexy".

Agreed, I'd rather get rude criticism than just an 'I like it'
At least then I know there's stuff to improve.

ITSTORRASQUE4U wanted me to make him a campaign map, to show him my skills. [Yo.]
I decided to make it about this series.
It's not canon, at the moment. But here it is.

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Post has been edited 1 time(s), last time on Mar 28 2008, 2:52 am by candle12345.